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Tired of my Escape

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Post by Holleh Sun Feb 13, 2011 5:56 am

So, I've been meaning to write more poetry/songs lately, and, well, I got inspired by a song I was listening today. "Unconscious Reality" by Artist vs. Poet. So this is similar in meaning, but not exactly. Just like... They're both kind of about sleeping. Metaphorically. Sort of. Mine implies literal sleeping and metaphorical. So. Yeah. It's half decent, and meant to be a song, hence the repeating choruses and the bridges and stuff. I played with rhyming a bit, just because I wanted to attempt a decent rhyming poem instead of another free verse one. It's not that great, but I kind of like it. So. Enjoy.

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There’s a brighter side, I’m sure
Just don’t wanna be so tired anymore
I wanna dream while I’m awake
So sleep won’t have to be an escape

Which way to go?
When you don’t even know
Just gotta keep being myself
‘Cause I can’t be anyone else
I can’t believe
My only escape is sleep
Gotta break the habit
Gotta snap out of it
This is my life
And it’s time to start living it

I’m the insomniac who’s always tired
I guess that’s just the way my brain’s wired
I’d rather stay awake
But I’m too drowsy for my sake

Which way to go?
When you don’t even know
Just gotta keep being myself
‘Cause I can’t be anyone else
I can’t believe
My only escape is sleep
Gotta break the habit
Gotta snap out of it
This is my life
And it’s time to start living it

Can’t keep my eyes open
Can’t keep them shut
Want to start living
Haven’t had enough
I’d rather feel the pain
Instead of being so numb
So afraid that when I sleep
I’ll never wake up
Then I’ll be stuck
In a life just as empty as me

Waiting for my reality
To become just as great as my dreams
Getting ready for the horrible
Bracing for the terrible
So tired of living in an escape

Which way to go?
When you don’t even know
Just gotta keep being myself
‘Cause I can’t be anyone else
I can’t believe
My only escape is sleep
Gotta break the habit
Gotta snap out of it
This is my life
And it’s time to start living it

Which way to go?
When you don’t even know
Just gotta keep being myself
‘Cause I can’t be anyone else
I can’t believe
My only escape is sleep
Gotta break the habit
Gotta snap out of it
This is my life
And it’s time to start living it

It’s time to start living it…


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Post by xStarr_x3 Sun Feb 13, 2011 6:06 am

I like it. :3
The only line that I feel throws off the flow is, "Then I'll be stuck, In a life just as empty as me"
..And the typo I pointed out. xPP
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