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Post by Holleh Wed Mar 23, 2011 11:20 pm

WELL. I'm bored, so I wrote another song poem lyric... Thing. Yeah. xP 'Cause I randomly got the song in my head, with the words and stuff, and then I went to write it like two seconds later, and, AS USUAL, the words never come out like how they are in my head. So inevitably, it's horrible. I guess. I dunno. With this, I was working with repetition a bit. And I didn't want it to be as rhymey as it is, but when I make songs up in my head... Like the flow is off if they don't rhyme in a way. Soo... Yeah. I dunno. And I usually explain the meaning behind each poem lyric song thing, but this one probably speaks for itself. So. Yeah. Hurr we go.

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Ohhh, say it isn’t so
We’re fading away
Running out of room to grow

Leave it alone
Just let it be
There is no future
For you and me

Sorry it didn’t work out
I’ve gotta figure myself out now
Paralyzed by fear
Struck down, no way out

And ohhh, say it isn’t so
We’re running out of time
And I just thought I’d let you know:
I’ve had my share of fun and blame
But if I don’t run, I’ll go insane

Say it isn’t so
Too hard to let go
But we gotta move on now
It’s too late…

Oh, whoa, oh, say it isn’t so
Say it isn’t so
I’m not abandoning you
I’m cutting myself off,
So maybe I can get through

And oh, whoa, oh, say it isn’t so
Say it isn’t so
Just thought I’d let you know
I’m sorry, sorry
But I’ve gotta let go

And oh, no, oh,
No, it isn’t so
It’s too hard to let go
I’ll just drive myself insane
Because in the end,
In the end,
It’s worth the pain

Ohhh… Say it isn’t so
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Post by Hazel Wed Mar 23, 2011 11:23 pm

This is really good. I like how it rhymes, the flow sounds great to me Razz
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Post by Holleh Wed Mar 23, 2011 11:25 pm

Thank youuu.
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Post by bibbit Thu Mar 24, 2011 1:41 am

As far as flow, this could easily be made into a song. I approve.
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Post by BPahl88 Sat Mar 26, 2011 4:29 am

Affirimive on the flow. I like how you used all the "o's" in there. Happy
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