Butlers True Love

Now we all know what happened to Artemis Fowl in his life time but what about Bulter? He had a story and had a life and had a love once... Wanna know what happened before Artemis came along? Than this is Butlers True Love...

Chapter One: Hello Aurora

"Goodbye little sister" Butler says as he boards a train taking him to the hidden school. "Can't I come with you? Please?" Juliet askes him with big hopeful eyes. " No. You can go when your older. I promise." and then he backed onto the train and took his seet. He waved goodbye to Juliet as the train started to move.

It was a long time before he reached his stop. He was tired but he was pumping with adrenalin. He had been waiting for this for so long, and he was hours away from geting it.

The train finally stoped and only 12 people got off. 10 of them walked away but 2 stayed. A girl and Butler were left standing there.

She was fit. Her hair was a dark red color and her eyes were a smoldering color of brown. She had a blue, long sleaved shirt on and a new pair of jeans on. She was beautiful.

Butler had never really cared about girls features but this girl was different.

Before he had time to finish his analasis, she walked up to him. "Excuse me but do you know by any chance were I could find a phone?" He nodded and handed her his. She diled a number and started to talk in rapid Greek. Butler knew greek and was able to understand... She was talking to her father... and asking for directions to a school. He lisened some more.

Then she turned to Butler and asked in perfect English "Excuse me, but what are you waiting for?" Butler answered with a simple word.

"Clasified". The girl smiled at him and closed the phone.

" I didn't catch your name. Im Aurora." she said. Aurora? such a nice name.

" Butler. Now I must ask you why you are here?" She smiled again.

"Clasified" She said. " So Butler, lets go catch a cab. We have a long way to go to get to 'Clasified'. This time Butler smiled back. "I think I will enjoy this."

He thought to himself as he and Auora walked down the street together.....

I like it. Good job.

Nice! There aren't many stories about when Butler is young. But I think that this would be exactly what he would be like. It's pretty good. Although, Butler is only a bit OOC. But for the most part, good! Butler has a girlfriend! Tee hee!

Chapter Two: The Beginning

It was a short taxi ride to the subway. They got onto the subway and got off at the 5th stop. Her father gave them directions to their destination. She told Butler about him as they walked through the suer tunnels. "This school is very secretive isn't it." Butler thought as they walked.

After hours of walking they reached a door lit by the a guard holding a torch. "So stone age" Butler heard Aurora whisper.

They halted at the door and the guard asked "Pass Word". Simultaneously Butler and Aurora pulled weapons out and pointed them at the guard. He was so stunned at their speed that he dropped his torch but his face remained emotionless.

He flicked the door 3 times, then punched it. Someone from the other side slide the door to the side and handed Butler a map. The guard, who had recovered his torch from the ground, frowned and said " Please state your name and purpose here."

Butler answered the same way he had before. "Butler, Classified." and Aurora did the same.

The guard scowled at them. "Classified?" And then he stepped aside. "Welcome to Madame Ko's 'Classified' School , there are three tunnels down there. The girls take the middle tunnel and the boys take the left. You are to go get changed. Then return to the turning point of the three tunnels. Take the right tunnel and you will begin your training."

They did as they were told. They got dressed into the clothes they were given and went down the right tunnel.

A women was waiting for them when they arrived. Butler presumed this was Madam Ko. There were other students in the room. She motioned for the two of them to sit and wait for the others to arrive. When everyone was there she began. She thanked them for getting this far and warned them of what was to come ahead and then we began.

It was a long week and the work was difficult. They woke at sunrise and went to sleep late at night. Butler never complained, he just learned and grew and changed. Madame Koe was very impressed by him. Butler didn't see Aurora much during that time but every now and then they would see each other for a moment and say hi. Through this, they became friends. Or as close you can have to a friend at that school.

One day, Madame Ko called Aurora and Butler to the hall were many of their lessons were held. To their surprise the whole school was gathered in the hall. Madame Ko called them down and started to speak.

" These two are the two best in their year. They have advanced well beyond their year. But they are equal in skill. So today they will test their skills against each other."

Shock washed over Auroras face and then quickly subsided. She faced Butler with an emotionless face. Butler looked back but he couldn't find any trace of fear in her eyes. " Choose your weapon and wait for my signal. You are to protect your principal, your opponent want to kill your principal. One will succeed and one will not. Chose wisely."

Aurora chose two daggers and Butler chose a sword. After this was done Madame Ko said "Begin".......

Nice. Aurora is an awsome original character! By the way, It's not Madam Koe, it's Madam Ko. Without the "e". Keep on writing!

Cool!^^ A few gramatical errors I can spot, but that doesn't matter, as the story is very fine. A nice concept. I'm looking forward to what is to come...

Thanks

Beware of Mary-Sues.
I love the concept. Butler has to have a teenager in there somewhere.
Your pace isn't too fast.
Remember to start a new paragraph each time someone new talks.

Butler learned that Aurora was almost as good as him. She worked hard and got most of the training down before any of others. She was already advancing into lessons beyond what the first years were learning. "If she keeps this up, she'll catch up to me in no time!" Butler thought. As he thought this he began to feel an emotion, not one of anger but a boiling envy. He realized it was jealousy. He had never felt jealousy before because he was always the best. Now... now he was about to have that snatched away from him.

That moved way too fast. Instead try showing it. Maybe by having Aurora and Butler fight once, and have Butler win.
Then after a few days have them fight again, and have Aurora win.
It just helps the reader feel what is going on.
You could extend that into a chapter or two as well. It would also help you show the reader daily life at the school, as opposed to simply telling them it. You could go threw the day in their life in more detail, instead of just saying when Butler woke up, which would help the plot (because you could get into the nitty-gritty with the development of Aurora's skills and Butler's growing jealousy) and get the readers into the story. That way they can feel like they are also attending Madam Ko's.
And there's a few spelling and grammar errors that I can see. But who am I to talk?

Good job, I can't wait for the next chapter.

Chapter 3: Competition

They took their stance and began contemplating. Each watching the other. Everyone watching them. Both trying to anticipate each others moves.

Suddenly Aurora through one of her dagger. Butler quickly dodged the dagger and it landed in the wall. Aurora moved as Butler dodged the knife and tried to get under him with the other one. He blocked it with the sword. She then tried to collapse his legs with a kick. No good. He jumped up in the air and swiped the sword. It cut through the air with complete accuracy. Aurora blocked the sword with her knife.

She through an uppercut to his ribs and mad contact. He stepped backward and grabbed her by her hair. She did a flip and loosened his grip on her hair.

She kicked the back of the legs and this time he went down. He fell to his knees and, but he through a fist up at her. It mad impact in her stomach. She lost her breath and fell back, her dagger sliding across the floor and landing by the other. Butler was on his feet again, he grabbed her hair and thrust her head up, sword at her throat.

" So how do you like a big strong man, Aurora?" Butler asked with a smug grin.

" I don't know." She said. " Im still waiting to meet one." Then she threw her foot up and hit Butler's jaw. He was knocked back and fell to the ground again.

Aurora flipped over to the wall and retrieved her two daggers. She threw them at Butler in a perfect X shape. Butler parted them with the sword but they still had enough force to nick the sides of clothes. He got up a little shaken but still determined. They circled each other for a long time.

Then Butler flipped over and threw his sword. It flew through the air with lightning speed. Aurora couldn't dodge it so she had to block it. The force of his sword sent her crashing into the wall.

She grabbed the sword and threw it towards Butler. She then cart-wheeled over to him and tried to kick him in the face. This was a mistake.

Butler grabbed his sword with one hand and grabbed her foot with the other. He forced her down but she kicked him with her other foot. He caught her other foot with the same had but not before she kicked him, hard in the jaw again.

She head butted him and this made him let go. She spun around and retrieved her daggers. As she turned to make her next move she felt cold hard metal on her neck. She knew it was Butlers sword. She dropped her eyes, she knew she had lost.

" You are dead, your principle is dead, Butler is the winner." Said Madame Ko as the audience of students applauded Butler.

Aurora and Butler face each other. Butler could see in her eyes that she was furious with her lose and hated him. They bowed to each other and walked away. Butler did not smile though. It did not feel like a victory but a lose, for both of them.

Weeks went by and Aurora said nothing to him. Not even a hello. But then Madame Ko called him to the hall once more. Aurora was standing there. He wondered why.

" You have been called because Aurora would like to challenge you. " Madame Ko said." So I will let her say it."

"Hello Butler," Aurora said in a polite tone, but as she continued her tone became more serious and annoyed. " You defeated me in our last battle, so because of that..." Butler knew what she was going to say before she said it.

" I want a rematch."......

Uh... I have to say. Honestly, that chapter wasn't too good. They wouldn't use daggers. Too low tech. They would use guns, and that's in real life. That was practice. But everyone has bad chapters. Besides, this is you first boo! Look at my first story: http://artemisfowl.fangathering.com/fanfiction/general/hacked

I love it! Butler needed his own story, and you did a great job in his perspective.

Great job

Suddenly Aurora through one of her dagger. Butler quickly dodged the dagger and it landed in the wall. Aurora moved as Butler dodged the dagger and tried to get under him with the remaining dagger.

Try not to use the word dagger too much. Or any word. You shouldn't use an adjective or noun (as well as some verbs) more than once in a paragraph if you can help it, it sounds clumsy.
Try using knife, or coming up with synonyms.

It's pretty good.
Beware of Sues! Aurora is getting there.
And Butler is a little Out of Character, but he could have changed. He seems more like Juliet than Domovoi, but, like I said, he could have changed.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

Chapter 4 : Agreements and Disagreements

"Oh you do" Butler said with extreme sarcasm.

"Yes, I, do" Aurora said, pronouncing each word clearly. Then she relaxed and said in a butter sweet voice. " But I would understand if you did not want to. Knowing that you would lose in all."

Madame Ko frowned at this, but then smiled. "So there is a rivalry going on." It was a statement and not a question.

Neither answered. They just stared at each other. Butler though long and hard about it. " Fine" he said. " One rematch and one only."

Aurora smiled. It was a new smile, one that Butler had never seen before. It was a sly smile. " Agreed."

"Agreed." Said Butler. He created a smug grin of his own that took her sly one from her.

"You have two days to prepare." said Madame Ko. " Train wisely."

So they set off to train. Butler spent most of his time learning patience. Waiting and watching. Aurora spent most of her time training in hand to hand combat.

Butler spent his days learning self control. He learned to move his body only when there was need to and to move prickly were he needed to be. He learned how to control the placement of his opponents body. He learned to relax his body but never rest his mind, to keep it working at all times. To never get ahead of himself, but to let they other think he was. He did not laugh or play during this time. He was completely focused. He could not lose this fight.

Aurora spent her time learning to dodge and strike. She learned to move fast on her feet and to strike with a blow that could brake a persons bones. She also learned not to make the first move, to let her opponent come to her. She went through lessons on sprinting, kicking, punching and other ways to damage the human body.

Finally the day came. The whole school gathered in the hall once more. They were not allowed any other weapon this time.”

They would prove what they had learned.

They took their positions and Madame Ko raised her hand. " In this round there will be no weapons allowed. You are to use only your body to defeat your opponent. Begin!! ".......

Aurora=Mary-Sue.
Maybe you should change her around a bit.
Or, at least she sounds like one, we really haven't learned enough about her (which is almost an ominous sign).
Take a litmus test.

I can't see Madame Ko laughing- the main point of their life is to protect the principal, not fight.
It's kind of rushed. Try adding some dialogue beyond what directly forwards the plot.
That sounded wrong, sorry.
Everything should forward the plot and the character development, but try adding more.
You can have them talk to their friends about it so we learn more about their characters.
You can show them training more.
Those three days- were they nerve-wracking? Was the fight the only thing on their mind? Were they desperate to beat each other?
How so? Is that what they thought about while eating the morning of? Or at night, did they go to bed late training?
Did they try to appear cool and collected, or did they just ignore everything while they were training?
How did Butler learn patience? Was Aurora puzzled, frightened, or neutral when she saw his tactics?
Those are just some of the questions you could answer by prolonging the plot and adding some scenes in between.

Other than that they only thing I can see wrong with it is the length. I want more.
Keep it up, I'm rooting for Aurora.

"So their is a rivalry going on."

There, not their, by the way.

How old are you? Just out of curiosity.

I'll agree with everything BlackOpal Just said except the part about Aurora being a Mary-Sue. Nice update!

What is a Mary-Sue?

See FanFiction Terms. It will tell you what all these terms we use mean.

To fast, not detailed. Not enough explanation. A Mary-Sue.

Chapter 5: Second Time Around

Butler stood there. Waiting, remembering all his training and ready to use it.

Aurora was just as keen to stay still. She would not lose this fight again. There was no way...

Butler stuck with huge crushing hands. Aurora didn't even have time to move out of the way. She was thrown off her feet by his fast punch to the stomach. She flew into the wall and coughed up blood.

Her eyes seemed to glow red with fire and then she disappeared. Butler was stunned to see this. He spun around to receive a hard kick to the ribs. He fell to the ground and groaned.

Aurora's eyes softened at the sight of Butler on the ground, in pain. They hardened at once as she realized that it was an act. He swung around and tried to collapse her legs. She cart-wheeled away. Butler jumped to his feet. Aurora punched him in the nose. This time it made a huge cracking sound.

Butler's nose spewed blood as he knocked her back. Holding his nose he kicked Minerva in the chest. She flipped over and tried to get back on her feet. He put one foot on her back to stop here. A spinning kick collapsed his other leg and sent him crashing toward the ground. He coughed again as he landed on his back.

"Remember your training." Butler told himself as he let go of his nose. He stood up once again and faced Aurora. She did not smile at him but fury fills her eyes. Then she attacked.

She moved like a cat, across the floor. She got in arms reach of Butler and then back-flipped away. Her foot trying to make contact with his jaw. He grabbed her foot before it could reach his face and swung her around and around, making her head hit the wall. She clawed at him with her hands and sunk her nails into his arm. He let go in mid-spin and sent her crashing into the door. Blood dripped down from her hair line and onto her left eye.

She obviously had had enough at that point because she went strait at him. She punched him in the face and kicked him in the ribs. She pushed him down. She bent down and put her teeth at his neck in bitting position.

"Enough" Said Madame Ko.

Butler wasn't done yet though. He grabbed her wrists and forced her down all the way. His thumbs just below her palms.

Madame Ko stepped over and looked. "Butler can kill you by puncturing you with his thumbs Aurora." Butler smiled with delight. " But..."

The smile vanished from his face as soon as it had appeared.

" Aurora can kill you by biting into your jugular. You both could do it simultaneously. So I would declare it a tie. Yet Aurora's way of defeat uses less time, thus giving more time to look after her principle. Therefore she is the winner."

For the first time since she lost she smiled. She smiled a real smile, a friendly one. Butler
thought it was because she had finally beaten him. If only he knew the real reason why.....

Chapter 6: Beach Banter


Finally!! One of the few days of Holiday that we get off. Everyone was going down to the Caspian's Beach to have a day of fun.

Butler met up with his friends at the beach. They surfed and swam and ran. For the first time in a long time, he had some actual fun. As he surfed the waves he saw a spot of red among the sand. It was Aurora read hair. She was lying on the sand, face down on her golden towel.

Butler spent so much time looking at her he fell off his board. His friends started laughing and a wave took them off theirs too.

"Dude, your off our game today." Said one of his friends John.

"Ya, Butler whats your deal? You seem distracted." Said his other friend Darik.

"It's nothing, I'm fine." Said Butler.

"Dude, no your not, we can tell." Said John. "Is this about the match last month?"

"No it is not." Said Butler, now starting to get angry.

"Then why, you were just staring over there..." His friend looked over to the spot were Butler had looked."OOOOHHH. I see whats going on."

"I'm sorry what?" Butler asked as if the question didn't even effect him.

"We see her." Said Darik.

"See who?" Butler said, looking away.

" Butler don't be daft. You know you were staring at Aurora, she does look hot today doesn't she Darik?"

"You know it." Said Darik as they slapped hands.

"I was not!!!" Butler said, swimming over to John and hitting him in the back of the head.

"OW! It's true though, and you know it. Plus what happened to that self control you learned to have? You must really like her."

"Shut up John!" Butler said and hits him again.

"Okay! I'll stop saying it. But I'll bet you lunch that you can go over there and have one civilized conversation with her without it ending in a fight."

"Okay then, you have yourself a deal John." Said Butler.

"Good, you better get a move on then Butler, Auroras getting away".........

If you don't like romance or kissing than this is not a chapter for you.


Chapter 7: Wrong and Right

Butler swam back to the beach and walked onto the sand. Aurora got up from her towel and walked over to the food stand. Butler went over to the stand and set down next to her and got a Sprite.

"Hello Butler." Said Aurora. "Are you enjoying your day at the Beach? We won't have another day like this for a long time."

"Ya, I've been surfing with James and Darik. It's fun, you should try it sometime. What have you been doing today?"

"I've been reading and enjoying the suns rays." Aurora said, her voice calm and friendly.
"Butler..."

"Yes?"

"Please don't try to fool me, I know that you have come over here on a dare. One of them dared you to come over here and have a civilized conversation with me in exchange for lunch. I would rather that you to tell me rather than to sit here and lie. It doesn't suite you to lie." She gave him a warm smile.

"Why are you being so nice?" Asked Butler suspiciously.

" I can't be nice?" Aurora asked, shock running across her face.

"Well yes , well no, I don't know. You were serious at one point and nice at another."

"Fine. I won't be nice then." She said and got up from her seat. She started to walk away. Butler got up and ran after her.

"Wait! Aurora!" He grabbed her by the arm and yanked her around.

"Why Butler? Why should I? You don't want me to be mean and you don't want me to be nice. What do you want from me?"

"I, well I don't know. I guess I just want you to be yourself." Said Butler, scrambling for words.

"Well I'm trying to be myself right now but you think I'm not so what do we do now?"

Butler took a step forward so he was right in front of her."Well I start to believe you and you act like we aren't having an argument."

At this she laughed. "Ok then, so what do we do n...." She didn't have time to finish her sentence before he pulled her into his arms and pushed his face against hers. Her bright green eyes opened with shock and then closed. She put her hand on his chest and tried to push him away. After a second he let go. She blushed so much her face almost turned blood red.

"Why did you do that?!?!" She yelled slapping him on the face. "We were finally becoming really good friends again and you go and do that."

Her green eyes ablaze, she turned on her heels and stormed off.

John and Darik walked over to Butler. "Go Butler! Good for you." Said Darik.

"She didn't react that well though, did she Butler?" Said John

Butler just frowned. " Cheer up Butler, she'll come around" Said Darik.

"Maybe, maybe not. I don't know at this point." Said Butler

"But hay John" Said Darik " Does that count as an argument?"......

Wow. Best update yet! I think you've ironed out most of your problems now!

Holding his nose he kicked Minerva in the chest.

I think that you mean Aurora.

"Dude, your off our game today."

You're, not your. Did you mean "You're off your game today"?

I don't know, somehow I doubt that potential bodyguards would say "dude".
I envisioned them to be more dignified, but I guess they still are teenagers in most respects.

You're doing a good job of slowing down. The latest chapters are fun to read. I don't feel like you're trying to get through it as fast as you can anymore.

I don't know... I really like it.